An Unexpected Visitor Published by Zero Rewind on December 1, 2023 To view this content, you must be a member of Samir's Patreon at $15 or more Unlock with PatreonAlready a qualifying Patreon member? Refresh to access this content. Published inUncategorized
AnonymousJohn The use of first person here to denote things the character doesn’t know (e.g. “unbeknownst to me…”) is super jarring. I don’t recall seeing this anywhere else in the story. I’d recommend editing this to be expressed in the third-person.
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The use of first person here to denote things the character doesn’t know (e.g. “unbeknownst to me…”) is super jarring. I don’t recall seeing this anywhere else in the story.
I’d recommend editing this to be expressed in the third-person.